Very good start!
The start is very good! But i agree with Chronamut.
Try to simple it down a bit ;P This is like jazz, notes all over the place. Simple it down to a melody, and kick in the intro again! You got the all the notes there man! And plese use the glid-effect more:) it's awsome! But as i said, this is very good! :D
Keep working on this!